First Sub

needs work



Not sure on colour, so everything is changable



tell me what you think

What set fire to that sheep?

For me, the grass is too neatly spaced at each foot. How about a row of grass, or no grass at all, or a more random scattering of grass clumps?

yeah i dont like the gress either really..

i love the idea

but theres something im not keen on at teh mintue but cant put my finger on it..

The face on that sheep looks more like a horse's face, but you're the artist..... Maybe include something that shows how the sheep ended up being on fire.....

sheeps faces are boring.. so i wanted to give him more expression..

yeahhhh an idea behind the fire.. ill have a lil think

Roast lamb anyone ? another nice design good character emotions like it.

i think if i just called it roast lamb people would not ask why hes on fire would they??

Maybe the rays of the sun cooking it ? That would fill the space above.

Adding on to what actonacto said, How about a giant hand of GOG holding a magnifying glass? focusing the suns rays on the hapless sheep?

Wozzy on Apr 15 '08

First Sub

needs work



Not sure on colour, so everything is changable



tell me what you think



oh yeah and by the way this is a critique and not a "first sub".

thank you for pointing out something pointless



Actonacto... thanks muchly for your help

How did the sheep catch fire ? this is the question that shouts out of this image. I tried to suggest a reason for it on fire thats all. If i had a goat or mouse the same question would apply, unless you intended it that way ?

Wozzy: All 5 of your critiques start with This is my first sub. That all I was trying to say. I was not intending to be mean!



You look like you needed help on your design, thats why it is in critiques right?

Might I suggest a farmer holding a magnifying glass above the sheep?



Or just have the leg on fire and call him leg of lamb roast.





Ps i like your face designs, and your fat guy you did, they just need something to do.

ur good i love ur stlye try maybe on baby blue shirt and see hwo it goes but hmmm i think its cool just try do more work or mix the grass more with the theme ,,,like try different method till u feel they are mixed dont have to be even green u know

or at least try diff tone of green

I looooove his nose!...but again, he needs a story....spontaneous sheep combustion perhaps? :) Maybe there were some power lines above him with birds pecking at it which threw a spark into a pile of hay and then set the sheep on fire??? I think it would be a cute chain reaction :)

it would be nice to know what caused the fire, or why, specifically, we should find this funny. gimme a story. however, i DO like his expression, and the design is comical in nature.

i like wery much your design so continue..

Maybe a sheepdog with a match in the background? I like his face but I agree the grass is a bit to organised.



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first sub ..ha-ha don't think so:)

Like your style.

apparently all her subs are her "first sub"



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I think if you just remove the grass it would be 654 times better.

You could also place him lower and use the idea of the sun burning him like actonacto's second comment.

Thanks everyone

Hey Wozzy, you have some awesome illy skills. I do think this site is heavy on concept, tho, and voters would certainly ask why the sheep is on fire. As it is, this could be a great punchline, but it has no setup. Does that make sense?



The way it's drawn, it looks like it should be a concept shirt, but it lacks concept, you know? I'm thinking you'd have to go back to the drawing board and find something that explains the situation you've got here, and makes it speak a little more.



Hope I was helpful. Good luck!

Yeah i totally agree

i was young and stupid hehe and put these up because it seemed like the ''right thing to do'' obviously not hehe

thanks guys

Hehe. I'm a complete noob here, so I'm just learning all this myself. You could do some real damage around here once you get rolling, I think.

I like your style very much. I saw your other illustrations and I am a fan. In this illustration I would try to change the leggs and feet. The head is very expressional and with rounded lines. And the leggs are very straight. It could help if you put some panic in his leggs. Maybe that will help. Succes!!

i like it.. its funny.. maybe u could put a wolf hiding behind a bush in the back with sum matches or something..

if you did it on a green shirt you could use the shirt colour as the grass