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-Two birds with one stone! Do people even throw rocks at birds?
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Wozzy on Apr 10 '08
cruel people do :P
the concepts a good idea |
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I mean if you're able to hit two birds with one stone than you've definitely had some practice!
-Thanks Wozzy! |
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omnig33k on Apr 10 '08
Move the image down some on the shirt. The concept and the rock just seem like they call for lower placement. I really like it, though! I'd say to add a little blood to make the concept more clear, but red would throw off the colors.
Let me know what you think of mine? Armadillo |
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stejahen on Apr 10 '08
I agree with omni
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kleyman on Apr 10 '08
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Yeah I was thinking about adding blood, just didn't want it to get too gory. A deep maroon might look nice though
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Still testing out if I like the blood pool. What do you think?
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Updated bird and leaf definition
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Matt Butters on Apr 11 '08
Very nice, i like the illustration. The simplicity makes it feel very earthy and organic. Submit.
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stejahen on Apr 11 '08
Good, this might seem nit-picky, but you might want to remove the outline of the blood if this is the only color shirt you are using.
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keithcw on Apr 11 '08
Can you open up the design at all? It takes me a second to see the individual parts, it's all "gray and white" at first.
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curtispaulelliott on Apr 11 '08
i think the blood is too much. the least amount of information to get the point across is usually best, and it's not very often you see a living bird lying(/laying?) on the ground. also, i don't know if you want this to have religious imagery, but right now i look at it and think it looks a little anti-Christian. i think that falls apart having two doves, but doves they still are, so that will likely become an issue for Christians.
also, is that heather grey? if so, i'd much rather see it on a dark grey. heather grey (in my opinion) is good for athletic and school shirts. and then there's always the random, crappy shirts at convenience stores and drug stores. |
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stejahen on Apr 11 '08
I don't see how that would be a prob. for Christians. I'm a Christian and have no problem with it.
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Matt- Thanks Man
Stejahen- I originally made it without the outline, but it felt out of place with the rest of the images in outline. Keithcw- Open it up? Yeah the overall tone of this piece is a middle grey, but im not sure how you are only seeing just "grey/white" Curtis- I agree with Stejahen, I myself am a christian as well and don't foresee and complications with this imagery of doves. Yes, doves have symbolized christian aesthetics, but just because a symbol is used does not mean the idea behind it has the same meaning. |
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Letsgonuclear on Apr 13 '08
ha ha Christians don't worship doves....i'm a Christian and have no problem with this.but i do think you should kill the gray trim around the blood.
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actonacto on Apr 13 '08
Maybe some x_x for the doves eyes and a setting sun in the background ? nice design i like it.
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Little color change; not sure about the un-outlined blood pool
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StealthMuffin on Apr 15 '08
Like letsgo said the outline of the blood seems a little strange to me.
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DMT Designs on Apr 15 '08
I really like the design. You could have a texture over the entire design making it look old, reflecting the old cliché a bit more visually. J
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DMT Designs on Apr 15 '08
Sorry it's .Just an idea. keep it up.
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Thanks everyone, yeah i tried it without the outline on the blue. I wasnt to sure how i felt about it.
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Better Color Palette. Outline or No Outline?
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I do like the colors on this better. I like the outline, I think it could stand to be thinner, but I think it would lose it's feel and look more brutal... in a bad way.
I'd appreciate a critique: http://www.threadless.com/critique/18824/multinational |
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Thanks papaprime! Yeah Im thinking it needs the outline as well, just want to see how others react to it. I agree about making it a little thinner!
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Ehud L on Apr 16 '08
The bottom one. no question. I love the color pallete. This one is finished. I have decreed! :)
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The outline is ok...I actually prefer it without.
If you're going to have one, it needs to be much thinner and subtle. The color palette on this version is fantastic. I really like this idea and this design! |
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thanks guys, im still working on possibly adding some grass/ground detail.
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actonacto on Apr 16 '08
Much better i still think it's missing something above the rock some text maybe ?
Crit mine; Red Cell Love Stary Man of Mind Pharaoh |
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Ginger_of_the_Future on Apr 17 '08
Horrifying...
Is it suppose to be anti-war or what? |
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Its not anti war at all. Just a graphic derived from the old classic phrase, "kill two birds with one stone"
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I keep going back and forth on if I should add grass or a figure ground; what do you all think?
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The Cat Inside on Apr 17 '08
I think you should work more on the pool of blood. Looked more like blood without the outline.
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Madam Lu Queen on Apr 17 '08
I don't understand why you changed the blood.
Now it doesn't really read. |
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pencils22 on Apr 18 '08
I think it's a great idea, but the blood needs to have a more blood spilt look to it and a more blood color to it. It took me awhile to figure out what was going on and what this was. Maybe the blood can be a more horizontal design. Any maybe have the birds eyes the cute little cartoon "x's." Just some personal ideas. Good luck!
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ghanima on Apr 19 '08
I agree that the blood looks less like blood now, and I prefer the green foreground to the absence of it.
If you wouldn't mind, I'd appreciate a critique too. |
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dark_sunlight on Apr 21 '08
In my opinion: don't outline the blood. I'm not sure about having the grass in there... I think it looks fine without. I keep looking back at V.1 and I think it pops without the green shape.
Critique mine as well? Butterflies Instead |
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dark_sunlight on Apr 21 '08
I forgot to mention that I also love this concept, it's just so simple and clever.
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auxocrome on Apr 21 '08
Agree with all saying that the grass is fine, but the blood needs work. It kinda looks like a blob of jam with that heavy outline...
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Mix Tape on Apr 21 '08
I'd get rid of the lines in the blood too. It makes it look like a checker board or something.
Now in spectro-vision. Check it out! http://www.threadless.com/critique/17297/Zombie_Proof |


