Okay, this is really version two, but something screwed up with the other webpage critique, so I had to delete it.

In this version, I've made the back monk a little "rounder", added the requested "cheeky grin", and accentuated the headphones by drawing in music notes. Tell me what you think.

[The bottom half of the shirt is a detail of the top]

Good idea.



You shouldn't put the detail on the shirt. It might confuse people.

The grin looks more evil than cheeky, but cool concept. What if the monks were sitting around meditating instead of walking?

Nice design. I like the idea of the monks meditating instead of walking around. Also, the line you have between the monks' eye and his headphones makes his head look a bit skull-like. I don't think you need it.

i like it.

Ooh you liked my cheeky grin idea. Cool. I agree with Kojima.. putting the detail actually on the shirt in this picture worried me for a second. I think the design is ready.. now I just want to see the obligatory fancy presentation around the design! Good luck

Its better but i think you should play with colour, maybe use only tones of brown, dont use black...To me its almost ready

Alright, thanks. I'll try to make him look less evil and skull-like. I think I'm going to keep them walking in a line, though. I'll probably make a third version (without the detail), then submit.

Okay, removed the detail, so you can't really see the final alterations I made, but the guy wearing headphones looks a little less evil now...(though I decided to keep the "skull" line, because it looks better with it)

I'll submit any time now.

I like it. Very cool.