I would like to stress this is a rough, early version and I plan to arrange things differently and add a lot more images.



The idea is a collage of american culture. But instead of going for the typical stars n stripes, eagles, baseball and apple pie, I wanted to make it out of low culture. So it has monster trucks, cheeseburgers, and Hulk Hogan. I would appreciate a lot of feedback on this! Thanks!

I think I just had a heart attack from looking at this design

I think the idea of it is interesting, but the images used now remind me more of Texas, than of all of America. It could also be viewed as putting America in a negative light. Guns, fast food, more food, and what looks like a bomb exploding? The images are just a bit questionable. As far as the design goes, everything is designed pretty well for the limited amount of colors used. The faces are incredibly detailed. I don't really like the barbecue grill. It is hard to distinguish what the pink coming from it is. And I minor thing I just noticed, the cheeseburger looks good, but its weird that the two burgers are above all of the lettuce and stuff. Thats a minor detail that I felt the need to express.



I think it may be hard to do this, mainly because what America is to you, is not going to be the same as what America is to others. I know that this is an early version, so its possible that in later versions there may be more objects that everyone can relate to. But this critique is based on this version. (I hope I wasn't too mean or anything, I just like to be honest when I give critique. Sorry if I was :( )

it´s too much...

Thanks, Madshadow, I appreciate your in-depth and honest advice. While I'm not aiming to put America in a negative light, I'm certainly not trying to portray it as something perfect, so I think a lot of the images could be considered negative. I admit I probably went overboard with all of the food, especially since its all grouped together.



As far as being too much like Texas, I figure I'll get rid of the bullrider and grill and maybe choose more relatable images for the rest. I hope if I add a lot more to it, it might drown out the negativity.

in relation to the texas issure, maybe if you took out the lone star it might help. i actually though this shirt was brilliant - i saw the images as much more of a satire, which is not synonymous to negative. in an age of 3/4 pounder big macs juxtaposed with war and diet soda, i think a shirt like this becomes more of a spoof rather than a criticism. but thats that.

in terms of design, i think you havent spaced out the red and blue very well, too much blue next to too much red. alternate them a little bit more, and definitely show placement.

amazing ideas, keep it up.



if you have some time, please score and comment on my submission… thanks!!!:

http://www.threadless.com/submission/156065/Escher_s_Mess_elation

Thanks, poseidon, I think you get the kind of idea I was going for. And yeah, i didn't space things out right, I was just eager to get some feedback on the idea so i just crammed the images together pretty much.

Happy Birthday, America! I started working on this design again. Decided to expand on it to make it in the shape of the continental U.S. This is still very rough and I need to fill some stuff in, swap the colors on a few items, and so forth. I could really use some feedback on this. Thanks.

i think this is great, id jut fill in some more spaces, like you said

It's still missing something.. I love the question mark suit guy. And is that malibu from gladiators that I see??

Ha ha. I've watched that video so many times before. The interview they have about it is so funny. Thanks for the feedback.

Oh my days, Hulk Hogan ...you gotta chuck in Ric Flair for good measure. xD

i dont think they will aprove this because of character likenesses

approve

Yeah, that has become a fear of mine considering they shot down this design of mine that was inspired by the same John Wayne picture that's in here. I actually submitted that to wooshka, so if please give it a good score there.



I figure this isn't quite as bold because there is lots of stuff going on. If worse comes to worst, then I'll try to make the likenesses a little less flagrant.

Bump

very clever :) i can't wait to see how you fill in the spaces



please crit mine?

Filled in some of the empty space and swapped a few colors to better distribute the red and blue. Feedback?

I think you created the most perfect portrait of America I've ever seen

Woah, I remember this design! It was like my first actual critique. My first question, is that an American Gladiator!? If so, I wish it was Hellga or someone. If not, you probably have no idea what I'm talking about, so I'll stop. lol

Ha ha, yes it is an American Gladiator, Malibu in fact. I decided to go old school, hence the original Gladiators costume, pugal stick, and hair. Thanks for the feedback.

i like how part of texas is a gun

I figure I have a ton of nitpicking ahead of me in getting this design just right, but are there any major suggestions?

So, my laptop is broke and I think I lost this design (this is a very low quality version, the real one is much bigger and more detailed). Here's hoping I'm able to recover the stuff on my hard drive and finish this design.

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OH NO.

I really loved this design honestly.

I don't quite get why southern California is a Tomagachi (which is uniquely Japanese, not American) but otherwise it's fantastic.

very amusing, my eye is immediately drawn to john wayne, pure americana

So, it turned out I had to get my laptop's motherboard replaced, but I was able to recover a few things from hard drive. Of course, I made sure to save all my threadless work. So, this is back on track. Thanks for support.

I would like to stress this is a rough, early version and I plan to arrange things differently and add a lot more images.





The idea is a collage of american culture. But instead of going for the typical stars n stripes, eagles, baseball and apple pie, I wanted to make it out of low culture. So it has monster trucks, cheeseburgers, and Hulk Hogan. I would appreciate a lot of feedback on this! Thanks!

Almost a year later and I did a little modification. Took out the Hollywood hills sign which felt like it didn't fit and put in a barbie. This has been on the back burner so long I'm just about ready to finally send it in, unless there are any major objections.

Wow! The only thing that stands out for me is the tamagochi... it says 'Japan' to me more than the 'US'... maybe thats just me though! :)



You might have a prob with the hulkster in there too... I'd imagine he's pretty copyrighted, but I'm never sure where the line is with that kind of thing.



Fab design though, really clever!

WOOO go AMERICA! codos, you dont see alot of patriotism these days, at least not were i live anyway. I agree about the tamagoci, put a budwieser there instead. i wouldnt worry about copyrights, ive seen printed shirts with darth vader and mario on them.

I took advice from the comments and swapped out the tamagotchi for a new picture. Is he recognizable enough?

Please for the love of bob just sub this already

Thanks for the support! After over 500 days since starting, I'm submitting a final version tonight. Hopefully it should be up in a few days without any issues.

Great design!

Let us know when it's up for scoring and good luck!!!

Can you help me on my design please??

Edison

Cinese Medecine

Declined!

And for threadless to decline it on September 11th. My guess is if I take out Hogan and John Wayne I'd have a good shot at being accepted. It sucks though, because they were sort of the inspiration for it all and how it started.

Amazing... but def some copyright issues there they'd rather not deal with



PLS SCORE MINE

So, I went back to this yet again. Took out John Wayne and the Hulkster as I figure those were the most flagrant examples of trademark or copyright problems. In their place are four new ideas.

I'm looking for any kind of feedback and plan to submit this soon.

very cool maybe add hawaii.

Could you give me some feedback please:
Chalkboard Doodles

PB & Jacket

Peas in a pod

Bump. About to send it in!

to be honest, i think you can still have the hulkster and john wayne in, just don't name them...since this is an illustration and there is no naming in it...they can't claim it's them specificlly.

just erase this thread after submition:)

Please help me out and rate my design: Killer B

Thanks for the feedback. I actually had submitted it with those guys but it got turned down because of copyright issues. Hopefully this version is considered acceptable.