Any suggestions?

How about the placement? Size?

Should the text be really there, or is the image enough?

great idea. id like to see a bigger version cuz i cant really tell whats coming out of its mouth. i think the design could be improved by adding alot more detail to the skull.

1. bigger version.

2. more detail.

3. bigger skull.

4. the hat needs to be tilted the way the head is. right now its not.

5. i think you need to make the message more apparent you know. at a first glance you dont think "keep nothing unsaid"



i hope that wasnt too harsh hehe. just trying to help you improve. but really great concept. I WANT TO SEE THIS EVOLVE. :)

1. need to see a bigger version.

2. more detail in skull and letters. you could possibly make them into words and put a spiraish message coming from the mouth. something whispy may be. i dont know just a thought. like swirling leaves leaving a message if you get mydrift. but not leaves.

3. need a bigger skull.

4. the hat needs to be tilted the way the head is. right now its tilted to the front not to the side where the head is tilted.

5. i think you need to make the message more apparent you know. at a first glance you dont think "keep nothing unsaid" refer to #2.



i hope that wasnt too harsh hehe. just trying to help you improve. but really great concept. I WANT TO SEE THIS EVOLVE. :)

sorry about the two comments hehe.

I like the idea, but I think you should refine the art a little, maybe use a brush with a scratchy looking stroke or something to give it some texture.

nice design but I want to see a bigger version, so I can see the details



Wanna crit mine?

http://www.threadless.com/critique/17860/Size_matters

Beautiful idea!

Thanks a lot everyone for the comments!!



Here is version 2. What do you think?

Which one of the variants looks better?

The style of the letters coming out of the mouth is not inspiring. I think the letters should definitely spell something and be stylistically interesting (wispy , smoky, sludgy, decaying).



The skull still needs more detail. Try some shading.



I'd like the skull smaller and in the upper right hand corner, so that the words or message is central to the t-shirt.