The title doesnt really mean all that much, just something to write in the blank space.. basically just stems from the style of dress and the fact that there are birds..

let me know what you think of this.
thanks

I think you should give the woman some color on her skin. Otherwise, she sort of blends into the background.

I really like the woman (her bow and hair especially). Seems like you put a lot of work into perfecting it! I also like the gray background... it seems to match the woman's longing facial expression.

Good luck!

http://www.threadless.com/critique/17233/Transformations

thanks.. Im not sure about putting color on her skin, I think as long as the tee color is something neutral it will work out, and I would rather have fewer colors.

I am going to work on the large bird ghost thing I think.

any other opinions before I start working on this?

update

I think I might have liked the old cliff better? And maybe continue the cliff's lines behind her a little?

Oooo.....I like the wings. Her face seems a little off. Like, it's too tilted for her head or something?

I really like it on that green.

fixed something i forgot to fix..

it's really pretty. her forearm is a bit bulky, but this is very nice!

good catch littlem ill fix that.

fixed her arm

fix her neck and ild give it a 3-ish

it seems a bit empty behind her. do you think it would be a good touch to add a teeny bit more background?

yeah i could put some more background in.. I need to fix the cliff a bit too now that I look at it again.


Raphe10.. curious to what I would have to do to make this a 5 to you..

hahah ^
i'm also curious! :p

k updated again, added some more background, and made her neck a little smaller.

bump

I think I will probably go with the solid blindfold one, but let me know your thoughts..

by the way, the new title will be "Learning to Fly" I think.

Nice work on the head. She looks much more realistic than in previous versions. I also agree with you with the solid blindfold. I think it tells more of a story with it solid if that makes any sense.

The only thing I would say is think about placement. I think it would look better in the bottom left corner of the shirt rather than smack dab in the middle. Maybe even wrapped around the back a bit.

Care to comment?
http://www.threadless.com/critique/17297/Zombie_Proof

updated

bump.. is this ready? maybe I should work on her hair a bit

it looks good..the placement is perfect

actually I think its a little crooked now that I look at it, since the model is kind of tilted. Ill have to fix it.

thanks sheepman

This looks better with the blind fold. Do you think maybe her dress should be billowing out more behind her? If there's enough wind to create those fabric wings then maybe the dress should be moving around a bit more too.

hmm.. I will see what I can do..

slightly billowing dress, and improved her hair.

wow, this is lovely and...sublime.
submit.

i agree - its so beautifully understated. the only problem i have is with the brown color of the birds and the wings...if you try changing them to something deeper it might help them stand out a little. just not to dark so that they ruin the quietness of the design. but really awesome nonetheless.

if you have some time, please score/comment on my design, thanks!:
http://www.threadless.com/submission/156065/Escher_s_Mess_elation

This has been submitted already, thank you for your comments though

Learning to Fly

Beautiful. I really like how its positioned to one side on the t-shirt. Looks great :)

5$

Please critique mine:

http://www.threadless.com/critique/24257/And_the_Wiener_is