I like it, but the camel appears to be very flat. I'm not quite sure what I would do to give it the feeling of volume, but I would experiment with trying to make it look less flat.



check out my design if you get the chance.

http://www.threadless.com/critique/16487/Pocket_Protector

tried to give the camel more volume....

That is one loud camel!



Playing. Seriously, though, this would look great as a large print, maybe with a center and side placement option. Also, I think some sandy tones would look fantastic for this.



The concept is very striking, though. I'm going to encourage this to move forward.

thanx professorE...

gonna experiment with the placement, tee color and size indeed...

Definitely go big. There's way too much detail on the camel hump to waste on cramming it into a little space.



do camels have tails? If they do, then this one is missing his, and it kinda looks weird. Maybe the balloon should be attached to it (if camels do have tails.)



I like the shadow. Maybe put it on the lower right (looking at the shirt) so the shadow falls across the middle?

jep, they do have a tail.... haha

better give him one :-)

LOL

LOL at camel toe.



Tail missing was the first thing I saw. Personally, I would like the hilights and shadow to contrast more.

indeed the 2nd design today where a tail was missing, hmmm I agree, more contrast, but I think it is a cool design!

working on the tail, and the contrast could be a thing as well....

but that's something i'm gonna work on this weekend.

I think that the colors are a bit boring, but the imagery is very nice. The characters are really flat, and could definitely use more volume. I don't know if your trying to have a water color wash kind of feel, but I think that another wash of orange would work well with what you have so far? Hope this helps!



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-A bit more volume, if possible

-placement i think should be large on the bottom of the shirt, sort of as if the camel and person are walking across the hemline

-I love the city

-i love the balloon

-the camel needs an eye, i think

-is that supposed to be the haghia sophia?

worked on the shadows and the colors... it gets more volume that way. also want to put a bit more detail in the town itself.

and the placement is much better here.. right?

Much better. Nice!



It does need more detail, but I'd say you have the overall picture down. It's looking great so far!

Work on the camels legs/feet and his bridle.

Yes! The contrast is great. What if the guy's turban was another little city or something? I dunno. Or maybe more wrinkles in his cloak. Seems like all the detail is smooshed into one area.

well, another version with more detail and i'll keep adding :-)



thanx for all the comments so far....

I agree with squishypanda, it might be cool if you put a few buildings on the turban too. Try it out.

ok, good idea

i really don't think you need all the shadows.

i could be wrong, but i'd try it without them.

@robinbailev:

wich shadows do you mean? on the ground, camel or cameldriver...?

the first thing i saw was a camel and with a town in the distance....................................................................................... i forgot what other thing i was going to say, oh well.

i remembered, the ears seem a little weird

the camel and guy look like they are made out of paper to me, but maybe that was what you were going for. . . ?

Hmm...it's kinda stereotypical to show Arabs with camels and mosques, isn't it? I kinda see this as being deemed offensive.

Keep the shadows. Though, looking at the camel shadow, something seems wrong between the city shadow and the head shadow, like there's to much empty space.



token_egyptian, I see what you mean by the stereotypes, but I don't see it as being offensive. The focus isn't on the Arab, but on the camel-city and the balloon. It's more of a scenic design than a cultural design, I think. It's true, I'm not from the Middle East, so I don't know /exactly/ how it might be perceived by an Arab, but it still doesn't seem "offensive."

The only reason it's stereotipical to portray Arabs with camels and mosques is because Middle Eastern nations have large numbers of camels and mosques. It isn't offensive if it simply portrays a local culture.

this is gonna be sweet when its finished

thanx for all the comments :-)

maybe i have to put some kind of a fur / clothes mapping over the camel and his driver. But than it might be starting to get too realistic.... and the focus won't be on the town on top anymore...... don't know if i like that... we'll see



to imaginary wanderer:

i see what you mean, the lowest part between neck and city hasn't got the right shadow...

only thing i have to add i think, are the muscle lines of the camel, and some more houses on his side (a quick sketch looked already convincing)



but i don't know about adding a town on the arabs head...?

I'd just stick with the town on the camel for emphasis. No need to put one on the turban too.

total redesign of the ground shadow &

added more buildings, and fixed the camel.



hope you like it :-)

I like what you've done to it, it's really improved!

maybe different shirt colours might be nice?!

to iels: also want a black shirt, dark grey, yellow and an orange one.



any other suggestions?

I like the idea, but the man need more work...

yeah Nicte Kono, you're right... the man is still a bit flat

without the detail i gave the camel... good point.



any other suggestions?

Nice idea! I would say more line detail on the man and also the came hooves. Have you thought about adding colour?

mouseonfire:

at first i wanted to use only black and white, but i added some greys to get the shadows better. i think i like it better when it's only greys, wich works very good on different tee colors i guess...

i never really like big shadows like that on t-shirt designs, but the camel is excellent

new shirt colors and i've upgraded the cameldriver....

Not keen on the shadow, but like the concept

maybe i should make the ground shadow a lot lighter...?

made the shadow a lot lighter....

so the camel and his driver become more important.



what do you think of the different shirt colors?

Good call on the shadow. I'm liking the color options, esp. yellow and black.

really amazing.

the firey colors work great (orange and the yellows)

the only little problem is the butt looks a bit big (then again im not a camel ass observer) but it just looks a little off

great work though.



critique mine?

www.threadless.com/critique/15137/Mikey_and_the_Monster

yep, you're right... think something went wrong with the layers... thanx.

i'll fix it......

i like it!

the lighter shadow definetly works better, and the overall sahding is really good, have you tried different colors though? i know you want to go for a somewhat monochromatic style, but what about earthly/warm colors? like all oranges/browns, maybe a sepia? maybe just give a quick try, throw a sepia filter over all of it and if it looks like shit just ditch my suggestion and sub this mofo

for the different tee colors i used a custom shade color as well..

so the orange shirt, got a dark orange shadow,

and the green shirt, got a darker green shadow.. etc etc...



don't know if this works for threadless.. we'll see

againstbound:

i'll experiment a bit... thanx.

wow it really came far from the first one! I like it a lot! and i think the green, orange and black are the best colors for the tee.



mind critiquing mine?

http://www.threadless.com/critique/16648/iPatch

i think it works great if the greys are transformed for each shirtcolor to that particular shirtcolor range... (ie. orange shirt gets it own darker orange shadow)

the really dark grey/black is too dark, it makes the poor camel's butt look even bigger, poor camel!

haha, never thought that i would receive comments about a camels ass :-)

the camel got his tail back :-) and fixed the shadows.

an orange and green shirt color works also very well



shadows are specific for its tee color by the way

hope you like these too, let me know....

looks really good on yellow, and i think it translates the desert feel bettter, wouldnt mind taking a look at the orange version

OK, three color samples yellow (see V8), orange and grey (this Version)



hope you like 'em, let me know....

wow, this is improved!

great colours, I prefer the orange to yellow & would buy it for sure!

any other comments about favorite colors? (yellow/orange/grey)

then i know what to submit ;-)

Oh wow. I'm loving all the details in this. Its so cool to see the evolution of it as well. Wish I could give you something constructive, but its looking good to go to me. Great job.

the sandcolor of Version 7 (top left) would also be nice to show right?

again a set of two new colors (or check 5 of them together here)

Wow! I love the olive/green :-)!

yellow and orange are my favorites

any other color favorites?

sand, yellow, orange, green or dark grey (v8, v9, v10)



thanx

the green, definitely.

orange!

green......yep yep yep



http://www.threadless.com/critique/16839/Fire_Ball_Of_Life

this turned out great man i have been checkin on it sense you first posted it...i personally like orange or green

the four favorite colors in one version

not sure about the presentation itself... still working on that...

the navy is my favorite.

i love how much it's improved.

i like it on yellow the best

Such a clever design :)

Ok, it's for sub now :-)

Go and have a vote in the sub list, before it walks away

The back leg is weirding me out. That's about it.

more colorssss

to 5napple, these are the colros wich looks best i think, otherwise take a look at v6.

have a vote in the sub list, before it walks away

Wow, I like this! One small thing though, the guy's foot might stand out a little too much, you might want to make it lighter.