I hope you like this one... tell me what do you think.

I present two color, i have not a prefered now...

....aaaaachoooo! ;o) Pretty. I think I like it better on the blue, but the brown has better contrast. Maybe a darker blue. I also wonder if this might be better lower on th shirt so the pollen could waft up the shirt instead of sideways.

I like the idea, though I would agree with keter and put the flower down further and have the pollen flow up and out. Maybe also add some bees that are helping out? :D



If you get the chance, Please comment on my design:

http://www.threadless.com/critique/12106/Balloon_Golf

I make some changes about you say... i wait for the coments. (Tankyou!)

I think it definitely looks better in the newer version. I might like to see the flower in the bottom right or left, with the pollen wafting towards the opposite shoulder? Just a thought. The bees are cute.

First off, I think you should make your design bigger. Right now the viewer can't appreciate the details. Just use a color background to indicate the shirt color. You don't have to show the tee outline, you have tees showing placement below. Also you can go to 640x800 pixels in sub size, yours is now 640x640.



Though I can't see the bee details, the design appears to have a simple, airy, lyrical style, like the breeze that's lifting the pollen. So the style works in supporting and conveying the flower/bee in springtime theme.



However, one technique that is usually disliked on this site is copy & paste. Meaning, your flower leaves and bees are the same. To most critics here, this indicates that the artist didn't make much of an effort.



Worse than that, designs that repeat the same shapes usually look like wall paper designs or the unimaginative cards and wrapping paper you find in gift shops. These designs don't really challenge the eye, (like wall paper they go unnoticed), and the viewer is left with no feeling towards them.



The opposite technique, variety, (a mixture of shapes, forms, textures, colors, etc.), challenges the eye and engages the viewer. These more engaging designs are more likely to be valued and praised for their distinctiveness and the visual pleasure that they give.



So, my best advice to you would be to continue with the airy and lyrical style you are using to convey the sense of spring and renewal but to vary the shapes and forms of the leaves and bees to better challenge the eye and engage the viewer.



Another suggestion would be to feature a female model because your illustrative style and the gentle nature of the design's narrative have a more feminine sensitivity about it. Cheers!



P.S. For future reference, there are some very sharp, easy-to-silhouette models wearing correctly colored T-shirts at the sight below. They're not goofy and don't look as bad as the threadless models. It was generously put up for all to use by idansimpson, a threadless member. There not as emotive, so don't distract from the shirt design as much as the threadless models do. Unfortunately, it doesn't include female models, so you'll have to rely on threadless or your own photo to show a woman's tee.



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Thank you so much Guister...

I gonna try again. See you later!

Finally I decided 100% by the Royal blue.

I think this new version is a little heavier for the eyes, I hope your opinions...

I love the flower, I'm not so sure about the bees, they are a bit too abstract, and the wings colours make it difficult to understand it

The flower looks awesome! But I agree, the bees are too stylized now. I wouldn't know what they were if you didn't say in the picture. Otherwise, it's really coming together!

beautiful design, but blue color does NOT match. Try leaving it on white or a pastel green and darken the other colors.



critique mine?

http://www.threadless.com/critique/15702/Maurits_Paramour

i would have no idea what this was at all, if i saw someone wearing it

really like the polon -- not sure I would prefer to have it on a royal-blue shirt -- I could actually go for a white shirt myself with this one ... and having a bit of difficulty conceptualizing the bee -- which may be fine if you're going for abstract as a stylistic decision. At a distance I see the flower and assume they're bees -- it's just up-close that they lose me.

i need your coments one more time, please!

It's probably not something I'd wear, but I'm impressed with how much improvement you've made since the first version.

love it.

reminds me of graphics to test colorblindness (on purpose?).

beautiful.

sweetness!

Like but maybe change tee color so it is easier to see (light blue

or black maybe).



http://www.threadless.com/critique/20198/Black_Skull