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Doesn\'t everyone dream about how much they love/hate Jeff Coons?
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I do, but personally it's not something I would wear. Orange isn't my thing - but obviously that's my problem.
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CottonShirt on Mar 02 '08
Cool, man! I agree w/ Chengui, tho... might try a red or dark purple?
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Completely reinvented with a lot of the same elements. I like this a lot more. Going to keep developing it. Any directions at this point? I expect it to change drastically from here to something else.
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This is brilliant!!!!
Love the graphical style Love it on the green! Maybe add a view more elements just to give it some added depth then - submit! |
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Thanks. Dunno if I should submit this or drastically transform it. I am going for a vague figure; you can see the head and the hand. Should I complete the figure by adding another hand, legs, and feet?
Anyone else have any input? |
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I don't like the tree. I love everything about the design except the top left corner where the tree and building are. Maybe make a tree that doesn't look like cheaply vectorized clipart. It doesn't match the rest of the nice clean art in your design.
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Huh? By the end of this I will have a breakthrough. I will create something unique that I am happy with.
In this thing, I'm thinking about natural systems and human relationship to those systems. I hope to keep it abstract, and I want the reading to stay ambiguous. This could still go in a lot of different directions. Just look at V1 to know what I'm willing to go through with this. I don't know how it will end. |
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I like the additional elements and feel this is much better balanced.
I still however prefer the brighter colours on the green T used on V2. Look forward to what come next! |
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ElCEl on Mar 10 '08
loving the ideas behind this one and especially the human/enviroment conotations... nice one...
i think paper crane is right though about the colour scheme on v2, it reminds me of the honda ad and that nice feeling but serious messaging... i would think about going back in that direction. if you have a chance please have a look at my latest crit: http://www.threadless.com/critique/16583/where_do_they_go |
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Thanks guys.
I'm going to work on this more soon, but right now does anyone else have anything to add? |
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Its starting to really come together. I like this one best. The concept has been clarified and I'm not ready to start to refine it. What do you guys think? Which elements are weak and which are strong?
I think the bombs might be too simple. |
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jalinfein on Mar 12 '08
the first version is the best one
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I strongly disagree. This version is def. the best. But I agree, the bombs are a bit plain. Maybe some added line detail, or variation between the shillouettes. Looking cool though.
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nicke on Mar 12 '08
Wowee, I'm glad you took the wee cute pipe-clouds out, they didn't seem to fit. Very very nice artwork, but the message, if there is one, isn't entirely clear to me. You could maybe mute the turquoise colour just a smidgen? Those are my only thoughts...I like it.
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Thanks. Yeah. I was trying to reduce it down to only the elements that served a purpose. I've talked to some other people and I think it's close to being done. I might add some detail to the bombs, modify the color a bit, and add some more raindrops. Thanks for the feedback.
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I'll be honest. I don't like the bombs at all. I prefer version three.
I hope you finish this up soon. I fear that you may end up making the design too cluttered if you keep tinkering with it. |
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Still going. I appreciated all your critique, and while I know some people didn't like the bombs, I'm going to try to make them work. This is sort of just a completion of the last version.
Still might go other places with this. Its sort of just an exercise. |
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chaoticjaboa on Mar 16 '08
i think you should make the colors brighter and change the shirt color to black...but thats just me...
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C Kid on Mar 16 '08
Wow this design has changed a lot and changed for the good! I really really like this version (I just miss the little white smiling smoke 'ghosts' coming out of the funnel; I liked those). I agree it is almost done. Don't change the elements. I would place it a little bit higher on the shirt. Just find the right colors (brighter) and it is ready for submission. Good luck and see you there!
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I.Summers on Mar 17 '08
I agree. The elements are all there, but it's a little quiet on the colours. I think once the colours are sorted your there!
http://www.threadless.com/critique/17072/Unexpected_danger |
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jcoddington on Mar 17 '08
I really like the muted colors! i think they works well with the design.
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Okay, besides the colors, this is going to be the final version unless anyone has any objections. Thanks for all the crits people.
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Blah. I'm done working on this. It was a good experience, and I hope to continue working in a similar way to how I worked on this in the future. Dunno if I'm actually happy with this or not.
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4wordsback on Mar 24 '08
i love the color and design i would buy it!
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thanks! Subbed it under the title "greenwash".
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spacesick 2 on Mar 24 '08
ooh! cool. I dig it a lot.
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