comments please

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what can i add or change?...

and can you give me a better title for this ?

I think the porcupine/hedgehod should look a little moer prickly...

"Not Edible"

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Very nice illo, great style. Good story but maybe not clear enough.



I think most of us when asked to describe a hedgehog/porcupine would say, lot's of bristles, spines or needles covering a large rodents body. This porcupine is somewhat bare, devoid of the sticky things. He may be the shape of and have the snout of a hedgehog but without the needles, it's hard to tell.



The one big needle in the lion's mouth is also a bit misleading. Because of it's large size, it's hard to imagine that it came off of such a small animal. It's not a size relationship that's easy to grasp. I think you need to put many smaller spines on the lion's tongue and put a lot of those same-sized spines on the hedgehog to help the viewer make the connection.



The giraffe is incredibly designed. Great expression and body language. It might make it even funnier if there was just one tiny needle held by the huge pliers in his hands. He's so focused and squinting with just one eye, it might make sense to have him struggling with something smaller and hard to see.



Anyway, great start, keep going.



As for a title, how about, "I should have ordered the gnu" =]

aaaaaaaaahahaha

the gnu.

quite nice.

thankS guys!...i think ill keep the plier because it should scare the lion and kind of learning him a lesson...dont you think?

and about the hedgehog i agree with you and ill make him more spiny...like the spine in the lion mouth



and also i think the name quister suggest is great !...thank..

changed: the hedgehog have spines now!...and they matches to the spine in the lion mouth!...:P



what do you think?

comments please

I like. Shadows, perhaps?

thanks...the hedgehog is better here?



and maybe ill go for the name



"you should have ordered the gnu" =]

comments please

Have you tried other colors? I think there should be difference between the giraffe and the lion for example. I like it...



Mine is up for voting...

http://www.threadless.com/submission/152977/Heartache

hahaha, i like the concept, just not so crazy about the style/rendering. the hedgehog is so angular, then the giraffe is all loopy and the lion is somewhere in the middle? idk, i kinda like everyone to look more the same than that.

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very funny... style is sweet... love the colours too...



http://www.threadless.com/critique/13564/Paper_T

added shadows

comments please

Looks much better, easier to get. The porcupine is great. I wasn't suggesting to get rid of the pliers, (one of the best parts of the picture), I was just suggesting putting a needle in them. It looks good without it though, so ignore me on that one.



There's a white spot on the lion's cheek, a tear maybe? Maybe make the art bigger and the tee placement smaller on your next V so every one can appreciate the details. Try showing some different color tees, (you don't need models just shirts), everybody likes choice. The sand shirt works, it might look good on blue, heather, and natural.



I don't think you need the ground shadows. If you use them I think they need to be more than just ovals under their feet. They should be different shapes, but as I said, I don't think they add anything.



Anyway, great work, I'm hitting submit, and wish you luck. Cheers!

Great idea! it makes me laugh...nice work

thanks...im now working on some more t colors (green,blue)

and then i show you them :P

last version?



what do you think? can i send it?



comments please...:)

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Looks great, ready to sub.



I'm not sure there's a green shirt that color (in the roll over). Did threadless issue a new template recently?



Anyway, good luck. I look forward to scoring a high 5. Cheers!

send send send...

thank thank thank!..



and we go for the name "you should ordered athe gnu!" ?



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"you should have ordered the gnu!"



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I think "You should have ordered the gnu" would be great for it. Definitely ready for submission.

thankkkssssssss!!!!....now im sending it guys..wish me luck :P

Very fresh, very funny, READY TO GO I think!!!! I will score it goooood!!!



Please score and comment:

http://www.threadless.com/submission/167404/Angel