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oh_no_twon on Feb 16 '08
Last one I accidentally deleted. Please comment, if you choose \"Dont submit\" let me know why. Be as mean as you\'d like. If you think it sucks, let me know. Thanks!
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Karebear010 on Feb 16 '08
there was a pretty recent one about spilled milk already that won. Kinda along those same lines. So you'll have to do something more original with it....try missing person labels? i don't know if that's been done yet.
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oh_no_twon on Feb 16 '08
Thanks! I wish I had known about the previous one! I have only been doing this for maybe a week now. Missing person labels are a great idea, I'll get to work!
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Karebear010 on Feb 16 '08
nevermind...already used...but not won
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oh_no_twon on Feb 16 '08
Yeah, just looked at it as well. There has to be something I can do with this! Anyone anything?
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rAmpantDesigns on Feb 16 '08
Make the milk less of a circle and more spill like. I like the missing person label idea too.
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oh_no_twon on Feb 17 '08
Made some changes, looking for opinions. Feel free to be completely honest!
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cheapcityh4lo on Feb 17 '08
I guess I just don't really get the overall concept. Maybe make the milk cartons crying? I mean I'm assuming it's "don't cry over spilt milk" or something?
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woodcock on Feb 17 '08
That'd be awesome if the cartons were crying!
And if your not going to change it that way, maybe smoothen out the "spilt milk" around the edges. GJ Meng. |
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isaacdealey on Feb 17 '08
I find there are a number of critiques posted on Threadless that I just "don't get" when I see them. And usually I try to avoid saying that and I'll either offer suggestions about ways to make it stand out more, or if I can't think of anything then I'll just skip offering any critique. But since you asked for people to be completely honest, I'll just say "I don't get it". :)
I've heard the expression, "don't cry over spilled milk" -- which is really just a more polite or PC way of saying "don't be a baby", because babies cry when they spill their milk, because it's their milk damn it, and they wanted it! At that age you don't have a lot of "life experience" and emotions about everything are just raw and uncensored. :) But I'm just not seeing the path from that to the reason why I might want to buy this shirt. You can turn anything into a shirt if you find a good gimmick for it imo, so maybe you can do something around the notion of the baby and/or connecting the baby with an adult expressing the same kind of emotion. |
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oh_no_twon on Feb 17 '08
Good ideas! Thank thank you for being honest! I was thinking about making the twon standing cartons crying, and the carton laying down dead, think that would make this a tad better?
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oh_no_twon on Feb 17 '08
*two, not twon... ive got to stop doing that!
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oh_no_twon on Feb 17 '08
Still working on the crying face, will probably add arms to the cartons, what do you think so far?
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oh_no_twon on Feb 17 '08
Still working on the crying face, will probably add arms to the cartons, what do you think so far?
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woodcock on Feb 17 '08
The crying face scares me, lawlz, nice try with it though!
It's better though your making progress :) Comment mine if you have a free second, http://www.threadless.com/critique/15391/Tide |
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ElCEl on Feb 17 '08
yeah i think the face needs to be friendly-er but hey lets not cry over spilt milk...
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oh_no_twon on Feb 17 '08
Revamped face, added face to rear carton. Let me know what you think!
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Scudrack on Feb 17 '08
It's funny, but they'll probably pull the submission, because I believe they have a winner that was called no crying at breakfast or something and has the same concept.
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Saner on Feb 17 '08
There's no use crying over spilt milk... I like this... simple yet moving
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oh_no_twon on Feb 17 '08
Do they need noses?
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nah, no noses. the middle carton needs to be be bigger - its floating above the one behind.
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The Menace on Feb 17 '08
Cool :D
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DMT Designs on Feb 17 '08
I agree with "farflung".
Could bring the base of the middle carton down past the one on the right. |
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oh_no_twon on Feb 17 '08
Thanks for the suggestions! I'll get to work!
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oh_no_twon on Feb 17 '08
Moved the middle carton foreward, and revamped the eye/mouth on the rear carton. Suggestions? Comments? Hate mail?
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oh_no_twon on Feb 17 '08
I actually had to re do most of it as when I saved it, i accidentally flattened the layers. Thats what I get for using photoshop 6!
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sandri21 on Feb 17 '08
The design has improved in this version, but it seems a little too similar to Philip Tseng's "There's No Crying In Breakfast".
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sandimackechnie on Feb 17 '08
i really like this.. just a bit weirded out by that crescent eye of the last milk carton.. it's just like peeping over.. can u rotate him round so u see both of his eyes but he is still in the back facing the poor spilt milk. like, so the angle has the 'milk' label side more flat facing us. think it would add a different level to the design. dunno, maybz give it a whirl!
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oh_no_twon on Feb 17 '08
Maybe I could move that one over to be behind the carton, so there is a mourning half gal on each side, any suggestions of that?
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robinbailey on Feb 17 '08
different color options would definitely help.
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oh_no_twon on Feb 17 '08
For shirts, the design, or both?
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oh_no_twon on Feb 17 '08
Check out the last version, im torn between the two. Comments? Suggestions? Hate mail?
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oh_no_twon on Feb 17 '08
I wanted to keep it simple and cartoon like, and that is what the drawings reflect. I did have the title as Dont cry over spilt milk, but deleted my first version and just simply named it 'milk' the second go.
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Buster VanTango on Feb 17 '08
I like this on the green. Nice clean lines and simple cartooning, very cute.
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oh_no_twon on Feb 17 '08
Thanks Buster!
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oh_no_twon on Feb 17 '08
Please, if you are going to choose dont submit, let me know why! I want some feedback on what i should or shouldnt be doing.
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organicly on Feb 17 '08
they aren't crying and the carton needs to be open, or have an obvious split
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ElCEl on Feb 18 '08
now that the face is better i think it is awesome... submit this 5$
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vector_guy on Feb 18 '08
Add some shadows, so they are just floating. Also make the puddle of milk more irregular so it looks more like liquid.
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Dziwani on Feb 18 '08
Very cool
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Lisa Grace on Feb 18 '08
It's fine.
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gfuse on Feb 18 '08
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Line weight, more believable milk spill/splatter, and shadows will improve this design.
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Heddam on Feb 18 '08
i agree with gfuse, try it without the label, that will improve it!
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Skunkrocker on Feb 18 '08
I agree with everything Shakedown said. I also think you should use a little very light yellow tinge on the milk with an even lighter blue high light to make it more liquid looking but only do that if you have available colors. But definitely remove the label.
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The Menace on Feb 18 '08
Much better. I would try blue cartons on light blue shirt. More tonal.
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The Menace on Feb 18 '08
Oh ya, try keeping the black stroke off the cartons. No black.
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Jebus1225 on Feb 18 '08
This one is the better of the two. Very good concept.
If you have a sec, please comment on mine :D http://www.threadless.com/critique/15435/Camouflage_Sloth http://www.threadless.com/critique/15369/Carrot_juice_anyone http://www.threadless.com/critique/15411/Don_t_be_upset_when_your_TPs_a_little_clingy http://www.threadless.com/critique/15234/Snails_love_candy http://www.threadless.com/critique/15233/Puss_Boots |
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happydude on Feb 18 '08
maybe just add some shadows, also different colours, something brighter maybe.
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oh_no_twon on Feb 18 '08
Ok, got rid of the black lines, added different color arrangment, and removed labels. Any suggestions?
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oh_no_twon on Feb 18 '08
PS- The dead carton detail image is not completely true to the one for the design you see on the shirts. The one on the shirts is much more detailed and smoother. That was a draft I had saved.
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squidspawn on Feb 18 '08
try making the one with it's eyes closed crying milky tears and the other ones eyes maybe "welling up" with tears.
im assuming its a "dont cry over spilled milk" kinda thing? critique mine? www.threadless.com/critique/15137/Mikey_and_the_Monster |
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Karebear010 on Feb 18 '08
nice turn around from original. i like it!
vote when it's up! http://www.threadless.com/submission/152952/S0_Where_do_we_go_now |
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oh_no_twon on Feb 18 '08
Thanks karebear! Cant wait to see your design up for voting!
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nickbrookfield on Feb 19 '08
really good progression from the first! this is my first time on here and you see how useful it is to have other peoples opinions on it!
please pass your comments on: http://www.threadless.com/critique/15560/Nevertheless_I_Love_You |
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The Menace on Feb 19 '08
Dude, much better!!! Thanks for taking my advice. I really hope this works out for you.
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oh_no_twon on Feb 19 '08
Thank you!
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isaacdealey on Feb 19 '08
definite improvements :)
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oh_no_twon on Feb 19 '08
Ideas? suggestions? Anyone?
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Mr. J. T. on Feb 19 '08
I think the milk needs more depth, cream colored areas perhaps. it's a funny idea, maybe bettor if the expresions improve.
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seventhfury on Feb 19 '08
Looks GREAT! Awesome work.
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shm305 on Feb 19 '08
there's already a shirt featuring split milk.
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hanpetesly on Feb 19 '08
that is really funny and cute! I Like the light blue shirt
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-fatal- on Feb 19 '08
Your design has definitely come along. I like that you have moved one of the milkys to the left (makes it feel more tragic). the blue color is perfect. the spilled milk is getting a bit too complicated…find a happy median between the first spill to the new spill. There something weird about the black facial features…its not fitting as well as it should with the rest of the colors (try dark blue or something and see what that does). hope it helps?
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-fatal- on Feb 19 '08
Your design has definitely come along. I like that you have moved one of the milkys to the left (makes it feel more tragic). the blue color is perfect. the spilled milk is getting a bit too complicated…find a happy median between the first spill to the new spill. There something weird about the black facial features…its not fitting as well as it should with the rest of the colors (try dark blue or something and see what that does). hope it helps?
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-fatal- on Feb 19 '08
sorry bout the double post…finger slipped.
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oh_no_twon on Feb 19 '08
Ok- added tears to both standing milk cartons, gave the dead one a bend, and altered the puddle. How is it looking? Anything that I should change?
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applesherlock on Feb 19 '08
Wow its looking great! The one thing change is placement. It seems a just a little bit to high up there
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pink5585 on Feb 19 '08
I love it! I think your expressions are really good now as are the poses. I agree that the placement seems a little bit high and I think it would look cute on light blue as you had in the previous version, nice work though!
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oh_no_twon on Feb 19 '08
Blue is back by popular demand, also changed size and position of the image.
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ToxicAnarchy on Feb 20 '08
lol thats pretty funny
but it looks like the center one is bending awkwardly perhaps if you could see the bottom of him it wouldn't so awkward Critique mine? |
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oh_no_twon on Feb 20 '08
Anything else?
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oh_no_twon on Feb 20 '08
Anyone?
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Mr. J. T. on Feb 20 '08
i think they look cold... maybe they should be white, and the label should be blue?
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Mr. J. T. on Feb 20 '08
oh... and please critique mine..
it's called ''I'm Sorry'' |
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Karebear010 on Feb 21 '08
haha! i'm loving it more =] maybe add some curving/bending lines/folds where the "dead" one is folded...
My design is finally up to vote! thanks for your help and encouragement. http://www.threadless.com/submission/152952/S0_Where_do_we_go_now |
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cycomonkey42 on Feb 22 '08
ehh its pretty good
but not too original for my taste. Like there are a bunch of selected shirts like these in threadless now.. with like inanimate objects having faces |
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oh_no_twon on Feb 25 '08
Hey, I ended up submitting it and it's up for voting! Please please please go vote!
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