Ok it\'s back, somehow I deleted it...duh. Anyway this is V2, I added some more detail and ditched a shadow.



Keen to hear any thoughts...

I like it, but the blood seems off, maybe make it nanomachines or little gears or oil?



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Yes V1 is the same as V2, I accidently deleted V1 but I thought it should appear as V2, sorry to everyone who commented... but as you can see I have taken the comments onboard and worked on it a bit more.

I think it looks really good man!

Awesome illustration,

Personally I think that the blood fits well!



If you have a free second; comment mine,

http://www.threadless.com/critique/15391/Tide

looks like you lost some of the black line on the inside of the upper edges of the window - some of the pink meets the gray without the black to separate them. Other than that I still think it looks pretty ready -- I'm with woody, the blood works for me, but it's your design man, so I guess if you want to replace it then something like wires, etc. might work just as well.

i think the shadows would look much better with halftones instead of just dots.. now it looks like the mechanical heart has hair stubble

Your swimming up stream with this design. Hearts, (anatomical, valentine, mechanical, boiler-plated, stylized, etc.) have been used to death. Especially on this site (you'll get 1,323 hits if you type "heart" into the scoring, scored, printed search box on threadless). Meaning, if you want to do well with this you will probably need to be very distinctive in your thinking and your execution.



You've started out pretty well using the less used back view of the heart rather than the front. Your rendering is solid. Simple style, nice detail and texture, good modeling and color.



There's a grey stem at top you might lose, doesn't fit in. The pink patch on the blue rectangle seems to be made up rather than an actual part of the anatomy. I think it might work better if it curved a bit like the blue part and stayed within the blue. Right now it's a flat piece sitting on a curved piece. It's not that apparent, but it just doesn't sit right in the mind's eye.



I think the window in the heart, while well done, should follow the curved contour of the top, curves on the sides and the rounded end at the bottom of the heart. I think this will better integrate it and add to the continuity of the design, (a lot of work). It seems that you have enough gears to accommodate the added space though.



The robot and gears look good, I don't know if you can intermesh the gears but that would be good. The grey color, though logical, kind of saps the design's energy, they look dull next to the primary red and blue. Maybe a bluish grey with your dark blue for shading and stipple would work better. The robot is good, funny, but I wouldn't add white to your palette just for two dots. Threadless won't like it. It means another screen, labor, and expense so they actively discourage (dismiss) miniscule uses of color.



I'd lose the blood spurt and I wouldn't replace it with anything. I just figure if one pump is working they all should be. Could be wrong about that.



The grey shirt looks dull but you save colors. The black is OK and you save a color, (a lot of people usually dislike black except when used meaningfully, gothic content, night scene, etc.). The blue gene works. You might try the navy and dark grey to see what they look like.



I wish you could do something with the placement, (everybody puts the heart where the heart is), it's so predictable it's mind dulling. I don't have any idea what to do with that, just thinking out loud.



Anyway, a real good start, keep going.

Hey thanks guys for the considered crits. They have sparked some ideas so I will make some changes and put it back up.



I have been surprised by the ammount of anatomical hearts on this site, I didn't know I have landed on the most over used image. I am not sure about the blood, I might ditch it all together, it was supposed to represent the organic element, even though the heart is mechanical it is still pumping blood... But it might not fit with my new plan.



Stay tuned... and thanks again for the feedback.

god, I didn't realize that the heat design was so overused either. I have one that I have been working on for a while too, so that really bums me out. I just subbed it to, so now it's too late.

*heart, not heat

So I tried to break away from all the other hearts on the site. I am keen to hear some feedback on this new composition.

shameless bump... people??

Well you did break away from all the hearts positioned where the heart is. Congrats! Very imaginative, love the new robots, the pulleys, and the chain. It's obvious you put in some hard work as well as thinking. Well worth the wait.



I don't think you need the ruled line at the bottom especially with the pulley and shadow. Maybe move the shadow down so it's on the same plane as the bots. Still think the window would look better contoured, but it's just a nit.



Fantastic job, I'm hitting submit and will look forward to hitting $5 when it goes to scoring. Cheers!

nice design, there is someone who did a robot heart thing but yours takes a totally different vie won it, I like it



feedback?

www.threadless.com/critique/15802/Melody_Floats_on

Hey thanks, I need to tidy up a few things this version is a little rough on some of the detail but I wanted to see how the new design went before I gave it the finishing touches. Yeah it does take me a while to turn the changes around, I wish I had more time. So stay tuned it will probably be a couple of days before I have the final version to submit. I appreciate the feedback it realy helps.

Hi,



I'd maybe take off some of the hard shadows and also the line as 'quister' suggests.



I don't dislike the robots and chain but think it would work fine as just the heart alone.



Overall... good.



If you have time: http://www.threadless.com/critique/15836/The_Assassination_Of_Akabei

Ok so this is it, I submitted it... If you like it I would love your votes. :)



Fingers crossed hey.