what does the community think?

critique? are the colors awful?

I don't get it... Sorry, please help me out a bit

I like the colors, and the style is great.

they took their shoes off to jump, but they're standing in the damp grass awaiting their turn. Their socks are absorbing moisture from the damp grass/ground.

I like it. The colors are pretty low key. I like this palette: http://www.colourlovers.com/palette/279128/Flower_Pot



Here's a photo that has a color palette that I really love and am using in a design right now: http://www.burchardgalleries.com/auctions/2001/jan2101/l021.jpg

I like to look at real photos for color inspiration.

i think you could be a bit more adventurous with the colours, chuck in anything sack off harmony/palettes, and just make it look crazy as possible.

thats my preference, but i'm sure that wont make it go down well at threadless...



I like the kid in the air

I like the pile of shoes and the guy in the air, his expression is priceless. Everyone else seems grumpy having to wait. And that they look almost like adults in their faces. All nice touches.

thanks!

Very distinctive style, nicely balanced asymmetrical composition, great characterizations and expressions, all adding up to one really good illustration. Bravo!



Here comes the "but". I think you need to change the round shaped grass area, it looks like a pool was there, and it confuses the narrative.



However, even if you rendered the grass more uniformly and sprinkled some dew around, I still don't think i would get the story without another clue. If their feet were bigger I would just suggest darkening the bottoms of their socks. Maybe a bit more impatience in their body language or expressions might help me with the "Hurry up" part, but I don't think it's going to get me to "damp feet."



Personally, I think the title is just too nuanced to graphically convey. So my best advice, is to keep the graphic and change the title.



How about; Hurry up, xx xxxx xxx xxxxxxx xxxx :P

quister, thanks for the thoughts on this. the title was more of an after thought and your right, it should probably be changed. i am working on changing the "pool" shadow right now. thanks for taking time!

Quister made an excellent point about the shape of the grass patch, and I agree that the title doesn't really come across because of the size of the feet and that you can't tell they are really wet or muddy.

changed the round circle to more grass marks!

i got it right away! i can relate to the damp feet, good times..

OK, grass looks great, and the illo is superb, as I said in V1.



Now you'll forgive me as I read into this something that's probably not at all there.



To me, the figure on the trampoline appears to be more child-like than the others. The grass-bound figures have breasts and mustaches, and they’re all drawn with a more aged wrinkling around their eyes. So, I’m seeing the trampoline as a metaphor for a fountain of youth thing? Once on the trampoline, they’re young again. Surely my own interpretation, but that’s the narrative I’m imagining and enjoying when I look at this picture. That said I’m off to see my analyst. Cheers!

swf!

thinking of changing the title to: "one at a time"



does that sound okay?

any more suggestions?

Or, "My turn"



The olive and blue are The best.



Sub, sub, sub.

subbed! thanks for the help from everyone!

http://www.threadless.com/submission/152752/Only_one_at_a_time?streetteam=band-it