Just got Photoshop Elements 6... still playing around with it. Just a quick sketch I drew and colored in... Looking for tip to improve! Thanks!



How can I improve the Jelly jar, box, and magazine? They look messed up when taken from my sketch.



(accidentally deleted last critique \"jellyfish)

Also, what color should be used for the jelly jar/box/magazine?



I had an idea to make the spaghetti the same orange as the fish and throw in a marker into the water; is this good?

bump, I need help making the magazine in photoshop, any suggestions?

Maybe its just me, but Im totally missing the point.



What is it?

hahahhaahahahaha



is it like, a fish trying to make itself into a jellyfish?

Yes, that's the idea. I need to expand on it. Thought I'd put up what I have so far.

okay, so I have absolutely no idea what to do with the pasta box and magazine. Yes, I know they look like crap. Any suggestions?



thanks!

help?

i didnt know fish had arms...

I like the idea, but it could be executed better... maybe just the fish with his 'tentacles' looking at a book with a picture of a jellyfish, or looking at a group of jellyfish, or trying to blend in with a group of jellyfish. Or maybe even instead of a fish, a jar of jelly with extra 'tentacles.' I don't know, just throwing some ideas out there.

I think its funny and cute. I want to see it on a template though. I wouldn't get it without the magazine.... keep the idea and tweak the placement. Maybe there should be a window in the background (no walls or ceiling) that shows pink jellyfish outside. It makes me wonder why he wants to be a jellyfish - nitpicky but I'd like a different font, and the word on the jelly is a different color than everything else... i'd make it the same as the jelly or black or something.

I think maybe ditching the marker, box, and magazine and putting it in a group of jellyfish may be a good idea...then it may be confusing where the tentacles came from... the window idea might be good to... hmm so many choices

bump

The "tentacles" on him look makeshift enough that we'll know where they came from. Ditch everything else in the design and add the school of jellyfish, and have him trying to blend in.



And from now on, draw your words. That font looks very out of place.



Hope I helped. ^__^

i think .. u know wat i better not say wat i think

did u use paint?

I thought I'd put up what I had so far.... I have no idea where that line came from on top. This is nowhere NEAR finished.



I need to know what to do with the top right corner, I really have no idea what to do with it.



Suggestions? Thanks!

Also, I put this into inkscape now and completely started over because the whole photoshop thing wasn't working, so I had to redo everything except the sketch!

got rid of the line..



from prev ver



"I thought I'd put up what I had so far.... I have no idea where that line came from on top. This is nowhere NEAR finished.



I need to know what to do with the top right corner, I really have no idea what to do with it.



Suggestions? Thanks!"

I'm guessing that the jar has jelly in it. When I first looked I thought it was glue to paste on the strings but then the strings are taped on. If it is a jelly jar maybe put a few strawberries or grapes on the label. If he's supposed to spread the jelly over himself I think you might put some jelly on his body, as if he's already started, to help the viewer understand what he's doing.



The right fin's tip should be on the front of the jar, I can't reason in my mind how it's possible to hold it the way he is now, fins don't bend backwards.



Overall, the drawing is somewhat awkward. The lines are somewhere between uneven/shaky/bumpy and smooth/even, having the same weight. Shaky and bumpy is cool and smooth and even is cool but together they seem made by chance rather than choice. Hard to explain. Visit the illustrators sites below. Notice their lines and how they are consistent, I hope it helps to explain what I mean.



Maybe you should first sketch your drawing, don't worry about the erasing marks and smears, then trace over it to get a more fluid or purposeful line before you scan it. (keep a piece of paper under your hand so you don't smear as you did on the jelly fish, smudges are hard to clean up) You might experiment with different pen points or pencil weights to see what you like most or what your most comfortable with.



I'm going to stop here because I have no idea what program/s you're familiar with. It looks like you're drawing and then scanning into a program but I could be wrong and wind up being no help at all. I'll check back.



Blechman



Crumb



Baseman



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Puma7, you there?

It's supposed to be grape jelly right? Draw some grapes on the side of the jar! Not using text and getting the point across. :)

Sorry- been busy and haven't looked here in a while...



I fixed the fin, drew some grapes on the jar..... tried to draw jelly on the fish, ended up looking like crap. Also wondering what I should do with top right, or if I should just get rid of it.

im about ready to give up on this



inkscape is not working well for me



when i try to export it, it forces it down to 21 dpi so it looks like this, not sure what to do