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v1 song in the city 2, 1591 days ago, click to expand
v2 song in the city 2, 1587 days ago, click to expand
v3 song in the city 2, current version








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lajlaj
lajlaj on Jan 21 '08
okay, so the shape of the white swirly stuff is slightly more graceful, and is also a yellower color so hopefully looks less thick. if it still looks like barf, well....atleast is some really strong projectile musical barf.



i also realized that the thumbnail REALLY looks like the bird is barfing. oops.



also, obviously i added feathers. do you like them?
lajlaj
lajlaj on Jan 21 '08
oh and what do you think about an optional feather printed on the back or the shoulder?
nikolina100
nikolina100 on Jan 21 '08
oh wow! This is really lovely! I love the yellow, but the gradient rainbow in V1 isn't too shabby either.

V3 is the best, and I am all for an optional feather printed on the back or the shoulder!

really nice design :)
lajlaj
lajlaj on Jan 21 '08
thanks nik!



i guess the big question is....does it still look gross and liquidy?
nikolina100
nikolina100 on Jan 21 '08
gross? no. and I didn't even see it as liquidy until you posted that....

Maybe make it a bit tiny still, coming out of the birds mouth?
nikolina100
nikolina100 on Jan 21 '08
* tinier
eezarthegreat
eezarthegreat on Jan 21 '08
i love it...it kinds looks like the bird is puking music!! like nik said...make it 'tinier' and it should be spot on..



love it though :)
Gar0
   Gar0 on Jan 21 '08
gorgeous movement in this one, nice work.
deafeyes
deafeyes on Jan 21 '08
think that's really nice. think the colours sit really well on the yellow
lajlaj
lajlaj on Jan 21 '08
haha, ok in the last version everyone thought it looked barfy.
eezarthegreat
eezarthegreat on Jan 21 '08
i heard that if a bird poo's on you it's good luck?



what if it vomits...? :)
msdunleavy
msdunleavy on Jan 21 '08
think the "tinier" start for the music would fix the barfyness - maybe only one or two lines of the staff at first. not to be cranky about the yellow (it's lovely) I think the grey is more what the city is like without music/nature. I also kinda liked the gradient in ver1 and that it ended with the same color as the bird. am I being too cheesy?
lajlaj
lajlaj on Jan 21 '08
ahh msdunleavy, yeah thats why i liked the grey version too! but it seems a majority likes the yellow, so...
lajlaj
lajlaj on Jan 21 '08
oh and thanks for all the amazing feedback everyone. i love good feedback.
oneitis
oneitis on Jan 21 '08
This is looking good! I like the colors. (I also think the grey version wasn't bad, but this one's even better and more original).



And yeah, in the previous versions it kind of looked like barf, but it doesn't anymore. I like that you kept the splatter, but made it lighter, so that it seems more "airy" now. Like music : )





Another idea I've just been having: I think this might look cool in a "night" version as well. You know, darker background and a lighter bird (same color scheme: dark blue / yellow bird). But only as an alternate version (girls / boys tee), cause this is looking sweet already :)
ellabeeinc
ellabeeinc on Jan 21 '08
nice job.

I still think the lines coming out of the mouth could use work.

all of the lines don't have to start in the same place, you could stagger them, then you could also make them less straight out of the mouth. A little wavy at the beginning.. sounds waves would be more intense in the beginning... and longer and looser towards the end...



btw... a bird pooped on my dress during my wedding. I've be happily married ever since!
plazalinee
plazalinee on Jan 21 '08
i really like it

but I also like the rainbow colours more in the v1
jpeacockdesign
jpeacockdesign on Jan 22 '08
with a lighter color the background stuff behind the lines looks WAY better. i also love the feather you added
TheDood
TheDood on Jan 22 '08
love the feathers and the background behind all the white although it looks much brighter where the white lines are close together...maybe play with the shades a bit to even it out?. i really liked the rainbow option too.
Kizoku
Kizoku on Jan 23 '08
I like the faded ends of the stream of song (as opposed to the all-solid V2), but the drawback is that the musical notes are a little harder to see now. From any distance of more than a few feet, I suspect it's going to look like the bird is just blowing wind.



I wonder what it would look like if the notes were in the same blue as the bird -- which would also let you put them in the parts of the stream inside the city, I think -- but then you'd probably want to lose the feathers, so they didn't conflict with the notes. (Or you could keep both, I suppose, if the notes were a different color.)
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reamontime
reamontime on Jun 28 '08
I hope that you have submitted this one already. It's beautiful.
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