Lemmie know what I need to do to make this submitable.

haha this is so awesome. i would say make the lines a little thinner and maybe do some varying line thickness. also, what does it say on the side of the wagon? i think it would be funny if it said the name of a rocketship on the side

thanx!



It says "wagon". I just sorta scrawled something in cursive to mimic the radio flyer design you see on most wagons. But thats a good idea.

yea, i think that either the wagon should be blank, or have some rocket name on it. and it needs to be in a print less think so you can read it easier :D

also, i think the brown on that shade of green kinda blends TOO much. i think maybe a different color?

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ur talking about the shade of brown on the support beams in the background right?

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I upped the contrast on the back beams and changed the name to apollo 18

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haha id add some bent nails half in and maybe some work tools like hammer saw and some extra boards on the ground to add to the effect. =)

Ahh!!! good one!

Added some flags, nails, and tools. Let me know what else this needs. btw do you think it would look good with some clouds????

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lol, i think it looks good

thanks, does anybody think that this thing could use some clouds?

clouds could be nice, but then you might want to move everything down to the bottom of the shirt?

A full body shirt might be nice.. The negative space inbetween the bottom of the ramp and everything above is bugging me.

I think you should add clouds, make the end of the ramp much higher, and put some clouds. Make the design nearly hit the bottom of the shirt and have the end of the ramp (where the flags are) much higher, like almost to the shoulder. Then just add some clouds and your negative space is gone.



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I think I can make it a bit higher, too high though and this thing will become a half-pipe.

This is so yummy, I love it on green tee.

Well what I meant was make the right end higher than the left end, much higher.

Added in some clouds, let me know what you think.

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umm, here is a thought.. I really like this as it was in vs. 3 but I thought it might be cool to have a nasa shop somewhere in the back or something, either taking off with the smoke trail or getting ready to take off.. I dunno, just to show he is idolizing astronauts that go to the moon.. but maybe thats stupid I dont know. just an idea



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Right now, it seems kind of akward with it's placement. I can't describe it, but it's there. The image is sweet, but it doesn't feel like a shirt yet...



Maybe drop the image a bit, so it's along the bottom of the shirt, with the clouds taking up the top.

Better with the cloud!! It measured the height. TQ



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But placing???

placement shud be more centralised and get another shirt man...that looks shabby...don waste a good design with a bad presentation...

i like it, good art!

i like the idea, and the drawin.

maybe without the clouds ? or reorganize em

i like it.

one of these days....

^Ha, yeah, kinda forgot about this one. I'm thinking about ditching the clouds and putting in a neighborhood background or something.

The concept is good, but the drawing needs work.

Yeah the drawing needs a bit of work. Try adding a moon on the shirt too, it would be cool if it was located on the back somewhere.



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