please critique or say something for this

it's cute. the bacon looks like fruit leather though.

The bacon looks like a pencil eraser. But I LOVE THE ORANGE.

Cute characters Kooky. I think the bacon needs to be more wavy though. The textutres on the bread/toast and orange are great. The finish line does look a little odd so stiff and cut off so abruptly, maybe fade it out at the ends or have something holding it at both ends (perhaps a knife and fork maybe...)

hehehehehe... the bacon looks like something but you still know it's a bacon. hehehehe
thank you :)

thanks herk. it's great idea.

anymore?

maybe try lining all the characters up differently, they're obviously all racing to the same goal, but it doesn't look appealing with them positioned where they are.

and yeah, wavier bacon will help, he's easily noticable as bacon, but the waviness will be that extra push that makes sure even vegans notice him right away

thanks a lot

Cute design! I think the bacon needs to be a little more wavy, and the finish line does look a little odd. Maybe you could add posts holding up the ribbon?

When I saw this design, my mind supplied the image of a donut out of breath on the back of the shirt. Heh. Slow, fat breakfast foods are easier to catch. ;)

Great. The only thing that I don't like is the finish line... herky have well explained what I couldn't say about it in english. ^^
Love the textures anyway. And the colors.

thanks a lot guys.
'm on my way. i rework for finnish line. i use spoon and fork to hold it.wait for some hours.

how about this?
i work a donut out of breath on the back tee.

please, say something or critique this...

hahaha !
a donut is a good idea.
its a neat shirt, but the running breakfast kind of creeps me out.
i'd give it a 5, but probably wouldnt buy it...
i think the 2nd version is still better than the first, and you should definately go through with it :].
{but..uh oh...i heard jublin got a 3 something on his breakfast shirt :D}

do people eat apples for breakfast?

lol
i think its an orange...


and yes, i do eat fruit with my breakfast
:O

Yeah it's way better than the straight line above, but maybe add some texture to the fork and spoon, or some light reflections. And milk for the win! ^^ But where did go the apricot/peach one of V1? I loved it! :)

yah, I would definitely love to see the orange back- instead of the apple as the fruit.

thanks guys
sorry for the apple out there. it should be an orange.
:)
anyone more?

donut added!
submit or rework?

critique, please!

say something

something! harharhar

it looks good.

i say lose the apple (it's not breakfasty)
otherwise,
this is very cute
and sub ready

is that bacon Canadian?

ok i will lose the apple and add more color tee

thanks for watching and say something

I think it's cute but you could lose the bread and the apple. I love your art style and I can't wait to see it submitted!

A few things I would change..

- Make the Bacon a tad thinner.
- The egg should be more oval than round.
- The Hand combos are the same..
Apple/Bread, Bacon/Egg, Orange/Milk. Try moving the angles of their arms or something so it's not so noticible.
- Now that I look closer, the feet are the same on some too :|


Sorry, not to sound too negative.
Just a few suggestions, since this IS a critique.


The Orange is my favorite.
( and the Donut on back. haha )

I didn't really understand why there are items of food running for a finish line. But I guess its because the work 'breakfast' has the word 'fast' in it... is that right?

orange and blue

green and red

how do you feel ?

you're right fatheed

I think I like the red better than the blue. Definitely love the fork and spoon for the finish line - and hahahaha, the donut! I hope they print this one, cause I'd buy it in a heartbeat.

haha, this is awesome

I don't like the red or the blue: I like the beige used in v1-3 was better

as much as i dislike the ftw, this is drawn well.
the faces could use a bit more variety, and form.

thanks guys.

as Luke said change the faces a little then sub

Ok Luke and castle. I'll try.

The headband on the toast is priceless.

ok. i remove it,sqgirl...:)

No, no, no! It makes me giggle, I love it!

looks great kooky, nice work

thx guys

wait the minutes for final version

dude it's the breakfast of champions... duh.

final version

ok. submit or rework?

I don't like how the orange is looking at something off the shirt, while everything else is looking at the exit. It makes the drawing feel a bit empty; incomplete.

Everything else is wonderful though

thanks stratn

FINISH!

I think it's great, I say submit! good job!!

thanks artdrops

holy cowabunga just submit already.

thank crazy steven

SUBMIT!
and link us so we can vote.

Orange FTW!

awesome, great job!!

nice.

thanks guys. i submit it now!

Perfect. Good job.

thanks a lot for your advise, guys!

Wrap it!

Submit!

I really like the idea but why does the doughnut the only one with a shadow? Try adding shadows to the others to get a sense of depth for the image so it looks like the other foods are not floating so much. Other than that great work, I like it alot.

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"Sky High"