This is an illustration I made for a friend of mine\'s poem...

Does the text distract from the picture?

Would it be funnier without the quote?

Feedback Please!

just a note, the mockup of the guys shirt is shown on natural, but I think it looks better on white...

better submit it as a slogan, i hoonestly dont think you have a shot as a design, sorry

...sigh...it is just a character or two too long, it gets cut off in the preview as a slogan...alas

even if you teke off the 3 dots?

Yes, oddly enough. It took the design, approved it, and I posted it--then when I went to look at it again in my profile the last word had been deleted. I don't know why...So I found the old picture that I did and scanned it in. I do love stick people, though they aren't too highly advanced of an art form. :)

wanna ?

fuck it got posted wrong, changing want to for wanna

I like it.



I think I may submit it....but I would like some feedback about the text color/shading.



I also need to clean up the stick people's lines.



But it makes me giddy.

I need some Feedback PLEASE!!!



Help me out folks...



I love this but I can't get a feel for how it will be received...

called out for hershel?i thought i heard a little whine......must say that i agree with “againstbound“,could become more succesful as a slogan,for several reasons : textwork on a shirt has to be pretty neat if you want it to be appreciated by many people,standard typo“s are not very loved....i“m not sure about the stick people,but it might look too plain on the white shirt.....maybe you have a look through several submissions which reference the impression of "artsy" in it,if you really want to do this as a design with stick people on it....cause i“m not the best english speaker,i dunno anything about that poem,but sounds funny.....i know this wasn“t really helping,but it“s a bump! good luck!

what about changing "want to" into "wanna",loose the three dots and type "&"instead of "and".....6 characters less at least

New and Revised...

I like this version a LOT better myself...let me know what you think...

Its the Jung vs. Freud that I love so much....that and the look on their faces, her especially.



I think I like it on Truquoise or pink the best.

Okay idea, but the text and the stick figures aren't working out for me.

why are so many words capitalized?

hmm..i suppose it was my way of empasizing the words...I would still do it, to a degree. Next Version I will change the text to be capitalized like so:



I want to Srip you of your Logic and make Passionate Sense to you.



That way all the important things are adressed.

Fixed capitalizaton.



I am about to submit this...let me know any last input....

I really do like the new capitalization (the old version is on the little shirts) now that I compare them...



Can you read the covers of their books well enough? should I clean it up? I was kind of enjoying the marker lines and homemade look of it, but the text should stand out, that is part of what makes it so darn funny! and stick people make me laugh.



HELP and ADVICE welcomed!

Doesn't the whole freud vs. jung make anyone laugh like it does me? logic, sense, the whole psychoanalytical process...mars venus...does no one enjoy this?



...sigh...

The art is lacking, and I don't really get it...

hmmm...

well the text is a play on the phrase "I want to strip you of your clothes and make passionate love to you"

and the people are funny because I took it a step further when I drew the people and added the philosophy books to their hands.

Him holding Freud and her holding Jung is priceless! and I really like the look on her face.

That's about it.

i like it a lot

Thank you, anyone else?

I am going to submit this in the next couple of days if I don't get any feedback....oh please....placement, font, etc....



thank you!

but... if you strip someone of their logic... they don't make sense, and therefore you need logic for passionate sense.



Also, i don't know much about Jung, but Freud's ideas don't seem to be too relevant today. His writings on fetishism were just wacko.



honestly, i think this might be enjoyable to a group of philosophy graduate students, but will be otherwise under-appreciated by the rest of society. it's like if I made a shirt about how some male snakes plug up the birth canal of the female ofter mating, and made it into a pun. it'd be funny to the right audience, but way over the heads of most others.